Friday, 18 May 2012

Tip #229: Not so fast

Which of these two sentences is... stronger...?

He peered through the window and spotted a pile of bloody towels on the floor.
OR

He peered through the window and spotted a pile of towels on the floor. One of them was smeared with something dark, and in a heartbeat he knew what it was.

Blood.


http://romanceuniversity.org/2012/03/29/keep-them-turning-the-pages-by-laura-griffin/

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